Target Audience Feedback

We showed our peers our rough cut on 20th March so that we could get feedback. Above I have embedded the recording from that day. They suggested that our title needs to be quicker and the name should be changed to something more sinister, therefore we are going to change the speed and have decided to change the name to Sins of the Father...

They also pointed out that we did not have an ident so we are adding one to the start with our production name 'DOMINO.M.G', this will be in the typewriter effect to match the titles. Another thing they pointed out was that the dialogue was a bit quiet, we plan to improve this by overdubbing the sound.

As we thought may have happened, our peeps did not understand why the flashback was there. This has led us to decide that for the flashback it would be useful to have a textual overlay so that the viewer fully understands that it is in the past.Also, we are going to add a point of view shot of the dad looking at a picture of the young girl to show the audience that the picture is what triggered the flashback.